LANGUAGE AP EXAM 1998

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LANGUAGE AP 1998- Question 1
Suggested
Time: 40 minutes
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| Carefully
read the following letter from Charles Lamb to English
romantic poet William Wordsworth. Then, paying particular
attention to the tone of Lamb's letter, write an essay in
which you analyze the techniques Lamb uses to decline
Wordsworth's invitation. |
| January 30,
1801 I ought before
this to have reply'd to your very kind invitation into
Cumberland. With you and your Sister I could gang
anywhere. But I am afraid whether I shall ever be able to
afford so desperate a Journey. Separate from the pleasure
of your company, I don't much care if I never see a
mountain in my life. I have passed all my days in London,
until I have formed as many and intense local
attachments, as any of your Mountaineers can have done
with dead nature. The Lighted shops of the Strand and
Fleet Street, the unnumerable trades, tradesmen and
custormers, coaches, wagons, playhouses, all the bustle
and wickedness round about Covent Garden, the very women
of the Town, the Watchmen, drunken scenes, rattles; -life
awake, if you awake, at all hours of the night, the
impossibility of being dull in Fleet Street, the crowds,
the very dirt & mud, the Sun shining upon houses and
pavements, the print shops, the old (italics)Book stalls,
parsons cheap'ning books, coffee houses, steams of soups
from kitchens, the pantomimes, London itself a pantomime
and a masquerade, all these things work themselves into
my mind and feed me without a power of satiating me. The
wonder of these sights impells me into night walks about
the crowded streets, and I often shed tears in the motley
Strand from fulness of joy at so much (italics)Life. -All
these emotions must be strange to you. So are your rural
emotions to me. But consider, what must I have been doing
all my, not to have lent great portions of my heart with
usury to suchscenes?-
My attachments are all
local, purely local -. I have no passion (or have had
none since I was in love, and then it was the spurious
engendering of poetry & books) to groves and vallies.
-The rooms where I was born, the furniture which has been
before my eyes all my life, a book case which has
followed me about (like a faithful dog, only exceeding
him in knowledge) wherever I have moved, old tables,
streets, squares, when I have sunned myself, my old
school, -these are my mistresses. Have I not enough,
without your mountains? I do not envy you, I should pity
you, did I not know, that the Mind will make friends of
any thing. Your sun & moon and skies and hills &
lakes affect me no more, or scarcely come to me in more
venerable characters, than as a gilded room with tapestry
and tapers, where I might live with handsome visible
objects.
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LANGUAGE AP 1998- Question 1
Rubric
9 Essays earning a
score of 9 meet all the criteria for 8 papers and in
addition are especially full or apt in their analysis or
demonstrate particularly impressive stylistic control.
8 Essays earning a
score of 8 effectly analyze how Lamb uses techniques of
language to decline Wordsworth's invitation. They refer
to the text, directly or indirectly, and are likely to
describe cogently how strategies such as irony, humor,
syntax, and use of examples contribute to the passage's
tone. Their prose demonstrates an ability to control a
wide range of the elements of effective writing but is
not flawless. 7 Essays earning a score of 7 fit
the description of 6 essays but provide more compolete
analysis or demonstrate more mature prose style.
6 Essays earning a
score of 6 adequately analyze Lamb's techniques of
language as he replies to Wordsworth's invitation. They
refer to the text, directly or indirectly, and they may
discuss or implicitly recognize the tone of the passage
and how it is conveyed by strategies such as irony,
humor, syntax, and use of examples. A few lapses in
diction or syntax may be present, but generally the prose
of 6 essays conveys their writers' ideas clearly.
5 Essays earning a
score of 5 analyze Lamb's techniques in his letter but
their development of Lamb's strategies is limited. They
may treat techniques in a superficial way or develop
their ideas inconsistently. A few lapses in diction or
syntax may be present, but usually the prose in 5 essays
conveys their writers' ideas.
4 Essays earning a
score of 4 inadequately respond to the question's tasks.
They may misrepresent Lamb's tone, analyze techniques
inaccurately, or identify them without much development
or understanding of how techniques contribute to Lamb's
tone. The prose of 4 essays may convey their writers'
ideas adequately, but may suggest immature control over
organization, diction, or syntax.
3 Essays earning a
score of 3 meet the criteria for the score of 4 but are
less perceptive about how techniques of language convey
tone or less consistent in controlling elements of
writing.
2 Essays earning a
score of 2 demonstrate little success in analyzing the
techniques of language Lamb uses in his letter. They may
substitute simpler tsks for the one at hand, summarizing
Lamb's letter or simply listing examples. They may
misunderstand or ignore tone. The prose of 2 papers often
reveals consistent weaknesses in writing, a lack of
organization, grammatical problems or control.
1 Essays earning a
score of 1 meet the criteria for the score of 2, but in
addition are especially simplistic in their ideas or weak
in their control of languge.
0 Indicates an
on-topic response that receives no credit, such as
onethat merely repeats the prompt. Indicates a blank
response or one that is completely off topic.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 1
Although Charles lamb would
like to see William Wordsworth, he does not go into the
mountains because he loves the city. lamb does not want
to be secluded from the world by going into the mountains
because he likes to be surrounded by people and things.
he does not think that anyone can be truly happy living
in the woods. He loves to be in the city and would advise
Wordsworth to do the same. lamb feels that the mountains
have nothing to offer him. Lamb trys to declin
Wordsworths invitation by suggesting that Wordsworth
should come to the city to see him.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 2
In Charles Lamb's letter to
English romantic poet, William Wordsworth, Lamb declines
Wordsworth's invitation into Cumberland. He sites reasons
not to go based mainly on his appreciation of the
familiarity of his home in London.
To display his love of
London and his reasons to stay, Lamb writes of everything
in the city that is dear to him. He first describes the
lighted shops of the Strand and Fleet Street,
and the people and places that line it. He writes of the
liveliness of the area as he states the
impossibility of being dull in Fleet Street.
The activeness of the vicinity feeds him and fills Lamb
with joy, emotions that he compares with the way
Wordsworth feels of the rurals.
Lamb also describes his
attachments to as purely local and he finds no passion
for the groves and vallies Wordsworth might love.
The rooms where (he) was born the furniture,
and streets are all that are dear to him and believes
that he cannot find pleasure with the hills and lakes of
Cumberland.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 3
Really, the invitation is
declined in a way that is less apologetic than
self-excusing. Charles Lamb seems here to have no great
love of groves and vallies and, in writing
his letter refusing an invitation to Wordsworth's home,
apparently in the country. It is not the company he
dislikes, he explains, but the cost of such a trip and
the scenery it entails.
Already late to reply to
Wordsworth's kind invitation, Lamb seems embarrassed both
for being late and that he has neither the money nor the
volition to go out to the county. He says, frankly that
he (doesn't) much care if (he) never sees a
mountain in (his) life... seperate from his two
friendstrying to snow them that, really it's not
their company he has no wanting for, but rather the
desolate, deserted country. Lamb seems to love the world
that the city isbright, noisy, dirty, cheap, and
never dulllife awake...at all hours of the
night...loving the falseness and probably the
anonimity of it all. He acknowledges that the love he
professes for the city must seem strange to the sister
and brother who live in the country, but, he says,
So are your rural emotions to me. Perhaps,
then, considering Lamb's intense love of London, it is
not just a monetary price that he is wary of. I
have passed all my days in London, he
says,until I have formed as many and intense local
attachments, as any of your Mountaineers can have done
with dead nature...Perhaps Lamb is cautious about
leaving the city not only for the toll it will take ton
his pocketbook, but also for the toll it will take on his
connections to the city.
In this manner (one of
regret and nearly one of shame?) he allows his friends to
know that, although he loves them dearly, he loves his
city as much, and would no more leave it that they would
their sun & moon and skies and hills &
lakes.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 4
Charles Lamb writes a
letter of pity and condescention to reply to the
invitation of William Wordsworht.
The tone of pity that Lamb
uses to reject his inventation is apparent throughout the
letter. he speaks of the impossibility of being
dullwhich points to the possibility of dullness in
some other place. Lamb describes his awe of London and
how the wonder of the sights draw him in. He states that
he often sheds tears from the fulness of joy at so
much life. Lamb pities Wordsworth for not knowing
or understanding his joy. the condescending tone of this
letter carries his decline further. Lamb makes it clear
that he has no desire to accept the invitation because of
the location. Although they are friends, lamb does not
much care to see the mountains. he makes a most
condescending remark when he says the Mind will
make friends of anything. His unacceptance of the
country makes the statement clear when he asks Have
I not enough, without your mountains. Lamb is
fervent about his dislike of the mountains and that leads
to his decline of the invitaiton from a friend. Charles
lamb gives his reply to Wordsworth in a tone of pity and
condesention which stems from his feelings of the
mountainous country.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 5
Throughout Lamb's response
to Wordworth's invitation into Cumberland, there is a
tone of near boredom. It is almost as if, other than the
fact that he likes Wordworth, Lamb resents the
invitation. He says, Separate from the pleasure of
your company, I don't much care if I never see a mountain
in my life. This could either be seen as rude or as
Lamb's natural personality. Lamb seems to be saying in
this letter that nothing can compare to his way of life
and where he lives, why leave? He then lists a number of
events that occurr on a regular in his hometown to give
Wordworth an idea of why he doesn't want to go to such a
rural place. He states in that passage that he is often
compelled to take night walks, and frequently finds
himself crying tears of joy at the sight of so much life.
He goes on to explain that this way of life is all he has
ever known, and that he could never adapt to anything
different to it. The crowds and shops and restaraunts are
no match to Wordsworth's sun, moon, skies, hills,
and lakes, which simply don't affect Lamb anymore. He has
found his niche and feels that London is where he
belongs.
This method of rejection
may cause Wordsworth to become angry, but it might cause
him not to invite Lamb anymore. This seems to be what
Lamb is trying to achieve. He is trying to convince
Wordsworth that the city life is for him and that there
would be no point in his accepting the invitation. This
does not let Wordsworth down lightly seeing as not only
does Lamb give a direct rejection, but he continues to go
on and explain why where he lives is better and that he
pities Wordsworth for having to live in such a rural
area. Some may consider this rejection rude, but it
definitely gets the point across and accomplishes what
Lamb wants to say. His statements, opinions, conclusions
are short and to the point, which contributes to the
almost resentful tone. The diction of the passage is very
direct and leaves nothing else to be said about the
letter. This essay can be summarized by the statement,
Cumberland is boring, London is fun; I don't care
about what's over there, and I feel sorry for your having
to live there...I'm not coming!
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 6
Lamb's tone is a fairly
condescending and occasionally unfriendly one. He refers
to dead nature, implying that what he has is
alive, and therefore better. The technique of comparison
is rampant throughout the letter, as in I have
formed as many and intense local attachments as any of
your Mountaineers can have done with dead nature.
Lamb's main thrust is to make Wordsworth's world seem
small compared to his own large one. He refers to nature
in terse, single wordsmountain,
groves, lakes, while spinning a
wondrous tale of the glories of the mud and
dirt and drunken scenes of London.
As you no doubt have
noticed, my tone is very similar to that of Lamb's.
However, Lamb does not maintain this entirely. He admits
that rural emotions are strange to him, and
there is even a hint of regret when he writes he lost his
passion for nature when he fell out of love. Comparison
arises multiple times as lamb defends his pantomime
and masqueradethe city of London. He calls
the sun and moon no more important to him than a
gilded room...where I might live with handsome visible
objects. He obviously feels passionately about the
life and imperfect vitality of London, and has no
experience with and therefore disdain for, Wordsworth's
nature. This is attributed to the length of time he has
spent in London relative to the time he has spent in the
outdoors. This also is a comparison.
In order to impart the
lovable chaos of London, Lamb briefly utilizes one
technique of repeating multiple and random aspects of
London's streets. In this way he gives a good impression
of his own passion while simultaneously attempting to
convert Wordsworth.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 7
In declining an invitation
from fellow poet William Wordsworth, Charles Lamb
attempts to convey his utter satisfaction with his
present life along with his apathy for entering anything
new into it. Lamb simply decrees himself as one with the
city, of all its lights and sounds and excitement; and he
describes his utter lack of desire to experience nature,
that Wordsworth and his sister find so entrancing. Lamb's
use of a sympathetic and apologetic tone, coupled with
proper diction make his refusal firm but yet polite at
once.
Lamb opens his letter with
a polite introduction to his rejection, without even an
addressing To__; this immediately sets up a
respectful but a negative response. He goes on to
describe how although the mountains and nature have
created such an attraction for Wordsworth, he doesnt feel
it at all, but rather gravitates towards the city. This
provides a parallel transition into his argument to
decline the invitation. Lamb then goes on to vividly
recount the numerous attractions of his
London; clear imagery through precise diction to convey
his emotive state of euphoria and excitement the city
causes him.
Lamb alters his goals from
the first paragraph to the second though. While in the
first, he strove to keep his distance from the intended
activity, in the latter he outright questions why his
friend could feel so strongly about something so lifeless
and ordinary. His diction and tone alter for effect, and
instead of restraint, distance and respect for both his
friends and their passion, he expresses his contempt with
sharp, caustic diction. This paragraph seems more an
invalidation and renunciation rather than a true
conclusion. He actually concludes by saying that those
things found in the city are the same, if not better than
those parallels in nature. Lamb's letter is a convincing
one because he clearly outlines why he does not want to
leave, why he likes the alternative better and backs each
with much detailed description. Effective use of both
tone and imagery make this an effective and clear message
of denial.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 8
Romanticism: Effusiveness,
Masquerading, Beauty and Effectiveness It is a distinctly
nineteenth-century phenomenon that language, in itself,
can be employed and applied on such an immense and
elaborate level that the content of the writing is
completely dominated by the techniquewhether for
good or for bad, for emphasis or distraction. In the
twentieth-century world of blunt, terse wording, it is
interesting and informative to analyze a piece of writing
from the romantic erato seperate the
strandsto determine what, exactly, gives it its
sheer effectiveness. This examination can best be done on
the most characteristic method of nineteenth-century
writing, one which is so sadly rare todaynot the
oft-assumed novel, but the letterthe art of
correspondence. In the first month of the first year of
the last century, Charles Lamb sent a message to the poet
Wordsworth declining the latter's invitation to visit
him. In today's world, such a rejection would be short
and perhaps even brusque, and certainly no explanation
would be given; after all, ain't I entitled to be
rude? But Lamb would have had none of this; and so,
in the course of two short paragraphs, he manages,
through effective use of phrasing and tone, to offer a
substantial and rich reason for his rejection of the
invitation.
Lamb's first reason given
for being unable to come is a timeless and understandable
one: he would like nothing better than to see the poet,
but he cannot afford the journey. The reader takes this
in on the basest levelLamb has no money. For a
moment while the writer charges ahead: spiritually he
says, he could not bear to depart the City to visit his
friend in the Country. What an interesting reversal this
is: instead of the standard romantic declaration of love
for life in the Country, the writer understands that he
is firmly at home in the City! And so he explains why...
Lamb, having passed
all (his) days in London has completely absorbed
the sights, the sounds, the bustle of that superorganism.
His sentences pour forth, with hallmarks of the city
rapidly declared, with only a slight pause before the
next one: The lighted shops...the unnumerable
trades, tradesmen and customers, coaches, wagons,
playhouses...,--life awake, if you awake, at all hours of
the night, the impossibility of being dull in Fleet
Streethere a bit of rhyme, possible
purposeful, to keep the diatribe flowingthe
crowds, the very dirt and mud...the pantomimes, London
itself a pantomime and a masquerade... and so on,
and so on. It is a remarkable sentence, both in the
imagery presented and in its own spark of life. It is
joyful, flowing, cascading, all the words which
themselves could have been part of the sentence.
Yet a proclamation of love
for the City is not enough; he must explain why exactly,
he does not want to leave it for the Country. Here Lamb
seemingly falters a bitor perhaps not. In no
uncertain terms he tells Wordsworth that the Country
holds no appeal for him: I have no passion (or have
had none since I was in love, and then it was the
spurious engendering of poetry and books) to graves and
vallies, meaning that Wordsworth's land is silly,
trite, and ultimately childish and useless. I don't
much care if i never see a mountain in my life
writes Lamb, and though one may be shocked by his seeming
offensiveness in his decline to an invite, there is no
reason not to believe him.
It may be unusual to find
an urban-and antirural-romantic, but, as demonstrated,
such an occurrance is possible. More important than the
ideology is the base: at the heart of the matter, does
Lamb indeed succeed in his writing? Has he effectively
communicated to his friend the fact that he must decline?
Does he delineate this with pure explanation, and couch
it in a language that complementsnot
overwhelmsenhances the sentiment? Has he done his
job?
The answerto all of
these questionsis a resounding yes.
Charles Lamb gracefully allows his rejection of the
invitation to gently float down, cushioned in proper and
contemporary and complete language. He has done his duty
and done it well.
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1998 Question One Sample
Response: Rated 9
Philosophical and practical
associations of the definition of the quality of life
often conflict and contradict their counterparts in
literature; romantic ideals of nature are often
justaposed with the kaleidoscopic actions of society.
Such a clash of facons de vivre, although implicit and
insinuous, is expressed in lamb's letter to the Romantic
poet Wordsworth; lamb in a slightly mocking,
condescending, yet amiable tone, emphasizes this duality.
Through the reiteration of contrasts, the near deifiction
of urban life, and the debasing of the aesthetic aspects
of nature, lamb demonstrates that transcendentalism
versus urbanity was not a mere subject of controversy in
early nineteenth century literature, but in life as well.
Lamb repeatedly insinuates the existence of marked
differences between the tranquility and repetivieness of
Wordsworth's lifestyle and the bustle and dtransient
nature of his own. Although not glorifying or teaching an
undue perfection to the character of Londonhe
admires the very dirt and mud, the
wickedness about Convent Garden, and the
drunken sceneshe infuses the image of the
city with a sense of vivaciousness and excitement and
rejoices in the fact that he can revel in its baseness
and vulgarity. London to lamb, is a place of action, a
sensual and exciting habitat; it is itself a
pantomime and a masquerade,' a piece du theatre in which
he longs to participate.
This convivial swirl of
images and personnages is presented in stark contrast to
Wordsworth's rual existence; although starkly and briefly
mentioned, Lamb's disparaging comments regarding such
a desperate journey to Wordsworth's
mountains, groves, and valleys lead one to
assume that he could glean little joy from such a
peaceful, routine life. Lamb speaks quite frankly,
affecting a tone of near haughtiness and superiority when
addressing so-called `rural emotions: I do not envy
you, I should pity you, did I not know the Mind will make
friends of any thing. Althugh revered as the
salvator of the individual in Romantic post-Elizabethan
poetry, nature serves merely as a detractor, a sluggish
ingredient in lamb's recipe of an active life.
Through this unadorned
spurning of a natural existence, lamb not only refuses
Wordsworth's sociable invitation, but his entire
presuppositional system of thought. The satiating and
stimulating affect London exertsas Lamb writes, the
fulness of joy at so much lifeis the
antithesis of the reclusive, somewhat misanthropic
lifestyle endorsed by the Romantics; a preference for
society and learning, despite its defects, heralds the
arising neoclassical period. Thus by labeling his
bookcase and his human compatriots as the sole qualifying
elements of his life, Lamb represents the struggle
between Reason and Emotion, nature and
humanitythemes represented thoroughly in the
literature and politics of the time. one can say that
this letter is not merely an amicable rejection of an
invitation, but of a worldview; lamb and Wordsworth were
but pawns in the ideological battles of their time.
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LANGUAGE AP 1998- Question 2
Suggested
Time: 40 minutes
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| The following
passage, from Henry Jame's novel The Portrait of a
Lady, is a conversation between two characters,
Madame Merle and Isabel Archer. Read the passage
attentively, noting the conflicting views about what
constitutes the self. Then write a carefully reasoned,
persuasive essay that demonstrates which of these two
conceptions of the self has greater validity. Use
specific evidence from your observation, experience, or
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you've lived as long as I you'll see that every human
being has his shell and that you must take the shell into
account. By shell I mean the whole envelope of
circumstances. There's no such thing as an isolated man
or woman; we're each of us made up of some dcluster of
appurtenances. What belongs to us--and then it flows back
again. I know a large part of myself is in the clothes I
choose to wear. I've a great respect for things!
One's self--for other people--is on'e s expression of
one's self; and one's house, one's furniture, one's
garments, the books one reads, the company one
keeps--these things are all expressive. This was very metaphysical; not more
so, however, than several observations Madame Merle had
already made. Isabel was fond of metaphysics, but was
unable to accompany her friend into this bold analysis of
the human personality. I don't agree with you. I
think just the other way. I don't know whether I succeed
in expressing myself, but I know that nothing else
expresses me. Nothing that belongs to me is any measure
of me; everything's on the contrary a limit, a barrier,
and a perfectly arbitrary one. Certainly the clothes
which, as you say, I choose to wear, don't express me;
and heaven forbid they should!
You dress very
well, Madame Merle lightly interposed.
Possibly; but I don't
care to be judged by that. My clothes may express the
dressmaker, but they don't express me. To begin with it's
not my own choice that I wear them; they're imposed upon
me by society.
Should you prefer to
go without them? Madame Merle enquired in a tone
which virtually terminated the discussion.
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LANGUAGE AP 1998- Question 2
Rubric
8
Essays earning a score of 8 effectively evaluate and take
a position on the conflicting
notions about the self discussed by the characters in James's passage. They present
carefully reasoned arguments in support of their position using appropriate
evidence from their knowledge and/or experience. Their prose demonstrates
an ability to control a wide range of the elements of effective writing
but is not flawless.
6 Essays
earning a score of 6 adequately evaluate the conflicting
ideas about the self and
take a position on the competing claims. They present arguments that are generally
sound and use appropriate evidence although they may be less developed
or less cogent than essays earning higher scores. A few lapses in
diction or syntax may be present, but for the most part the prose of 6 essays
conveys their writers' ideas clearly.
4
Essays earning a score of 4 inadequately respond to the
question's tasks. They may
misunderstand, misrepresent, or oversimplify the arguments advanced by the characters
or use evidence inappropriate or insufficient to develop their own
case. The prose of 4 essays usually conveys their writers' ideas but may
suggest immature control over organization, syntax, or diction.
2 Essays
earning a score of 2 achieve little success in
identifying and evaluating the
conflicting positions about the self advanced by the characters. These essays may
seriously misread the passage or substitute a simpler task, not
developing an argument but merely summarizing or tangentially
responding to the question.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 1
In this ecerpt the
charaters have very different veiws on how they should
live. Madame Mearle believes that a lady should dress
very professional and also act it. While Isabel Archer
believes we should dress how you believe and not worry
about it. Both of these women have their own points. I
suggest you should develope yours.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 2
Madame Merle and Isabel
Archer are two very, very different women. One is a
materialistic socialite while the other does not care
about society and pleases herself. Henry James portrays
these two traits in The Portrait of a lady; the former in
Madame Merle and the latter in Isabel Archer. A
materialistic life is one that does not focus on what is
good and important, but what feels good and important.
Isabel Archer displays the good traits and becomes an
admirable character.
Materialism obeys what
society says is good and good to own or have. A person
obsessed with getting things will not pay attention to
what they need, but what will make them look good to
others. It takes away from a person's self and
individuality. Individuality is what keeps us from being
drones. Isabel Archer's way of life is admirable because
she recognizes the importance of self and self-respect.
She does not think that clothes express one's character
unless that person made the clothes himself. Madame Merle
seems to believe that society chooses what is good for
everyone.
*I really believe that
space aliens took over the body of Madame Merle to think
so stupidly. They must have taken me over too, for me to
take this test.
*The starred item was found
at the very bottom of the page by the test-taker.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 3
Both women, Madame merle
and Isabel Archer, have somewhat good ideas on what
self is. When I started reading the passage I
thought that I would side with Madame Merle when she
stated that we are all made up of a shell, and by a shell
she meant the whole envelope of circumstances. However,
she went off on entirely different direction than I had
in mind. Her idea of the self and the
shell came to physical things. She had a
`great respect for things. The expression of one's
self is through one's clothes, one's house, one's
furniture, the books one reads, and the company one
keeps. I do not agree with this and neither did Isabel.
She stated that nothing that belonged to her is a measure
of her. One's self is not a measure of what one has. So
the statement i found so witty at the beginning, that
self is the whole envelope of one's
circumstances, is not true after all. Self is a measure,
the whole envelope, of one's experiences. Everything that
happens to me makes me who I am. It does not matter if I
am rich or poor.
So in closing I guess I'll
have to agree with Isabel. I do not care to be judged by
my clothes; they do not express me. I wish to be judged
only by who I am inside, not by what I wear.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 5
My clothes may
express the dressmaker, but they don't express me.
Isabel Archer becomes very disturbed over Madame Merle's
opinion on how material items can express the
person who owns them. Archer thinks just the other
way. She feels nothing can express herself better
than herself, ..nothing else expresses me. Nothing
that belongs to me is any measure of me...
Society has always
encouraged its people to express themselves through what
they buy and wear. With sayings like, You'll never
have a second chance to make a first impression, it
encourages people to dress like who they are and to buy
things that reflect their personality, or at least
reflect the personality they want others to think they
have. In the conversation, Archer states, To begin
with it's not my own choice that I wear them; they're
imposed upon me by society. Today society says that
if someone wants to be successful, he needs to look
professional. A man could be the most rude,
unintelligent, and slobbiest person on earth, but if he
is walking down the street wearing a suit and carrying a
briefcase, society thinks he is expressing his inner
formalism, politeness, organization, and professional
personality.
Clothes and possession do
not express who someone is directly. Actually, in a way,
the clothes can reflect the person who chooses to wear
them in a round about way. The man in the suit and Madame
Merle can be identified as expressing their
superficialness when they dress for other
people. Dressing for other people might actually
express a side of the man's personality he did not want
to show. But, Archer's interpretation of what clothes are
not holds more water than this indirect
expression of one's personality.
Clothes and possessions
cannot express the person as well as the person. All they
do is express the person he wants himself to be. Through
this conversation it is clear that Archer is much more
secure with herself compared to merle because of her lack
of possession obsession.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 6
The debate on what
constitutes the human self has been discussed
and analyzed by many different people. Henry James
captured this debate in a passage of his novel, The
Portrait of a Lady. The two main characters, Madame merle
and Isabel Archer, argue whether the expression of one's
self is the true self. I believe that the true self is
not an expression of oneself.
First, Madame Merle
believes that a person's shell, or the way
people view a person's actions and appearance, reveals
the true self. Merle asserted that her home, furniture,
clothes, books, and friends all expressed her true self.
She believed that all her actions and experiences made up
her personality, not to mention her outward appearance.
Second, Isabel Archer believes that nothing in life aptly
expresses her true personality, her true self. Completely
opposite to Merle's opinion, she believes her belongings
are no measure of her. Her shell
might be imposed on her, and therefore does not reflect
her personality. She gave the examples of her choices of
clothes; they did not reflect her true liking, but rather
society's standard.
I agree with Isabel
Archer's opinion that one's shell is not a
reflection upon one's true self. Each and every person on
earth is unique. I have observed people and found that a
person's belongings and appearance is never necessarily a
mirror of his or her true personality. I for one, enjoy
reading, but never have the time to do so! I like sports
cars, but drive a Cadillac. I am tall and thin, but have
never dieted. I love animals, but do not have any pets.
My home, possessions, friends, and appearance do not
always reflect my true personality. Thank goodness!
Therefore, Isabel Archer's philosophy was quite correct,
in my opinion. For why base someone's self on
his or her look? I put the my in
self, not my appearance.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 7
I remember my elated smile
of surprise and pleasure at my birthday party during
sixth grade upon receiving a pair of jeans I had longed
for all year. A critical period with hormone heightened
emotions, the entry into adolescence pushed me to fit in
and conform. As with many other middle schoolers, I was
terribly conscious of the necessity to wear the right
clothes, to listen to the popular music, and to think the
things that hundreds of others said I should. I wanted to
be the same as everyone else. There was a comfort in
conformity. But now I look back and realize how stifling
those years were. The clothes, books, music, and places i
associated with were a part of me but a part that failed
to convey my true nature, my true self. I agree with
Isabel in that these merely exterior barriers are hardly
a measure of me; rather, they are limits to
the thriving self behind the shell.
I hid behind the shell of
Girbaud jeans, nice shoes and pop music in sixth grade
because I strove to be a part of a particular middle
school crowd. Though i consciously chose what tangible
objects surrounded me, i chose them to fit a pre-set mold
full of requirements of what to wear, who to speak to,
what to read. They repressed my individuality. And now
when I am aware of their strong hold on my identity, I
realize that these extensions of myself that
overflow into everything urge others to make
incorrect assumptions about myself. Since I read this
book and wear that shirt, I am automatically placed into
another pre-determined catagory that can not accurately
describe my self. Even people who claim they are
non-conformists and are expressing themselves through
eccentric clothes and music fall into the pool of
nonconformity. The continuing shell that surrounds the
self is inescapable.
Rather than claim this
shell as an extension to the self, I agree that it is
nothing but a barrier and acknowledge that nothing can
truly express me. I do not desire for people to take one
cursory glance at my `shell and immediately acquire
a true definition of my self. Hopefully others will look
deeper, hear my words, and perceive my actions. Then will
they know me.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 8
For eighteen years I have
attempted to grasp the slippery form that is the self. I
have tried to seek him out, grab his slimy body and bring
him into the sunlight where i can clearly see the sun
reflect off his cold scales. But this is a difficult
task. Instead, I have had to look for quiet windows into
the self. In essence I have had to look to
self-expression for an understanding. From the books I
read to the friends I keep, I find a reflection of
myself. The freedom of choice has allowed me a nearly
limitless canvas upon which to paint my likeness. Books,
activities, and friends have become my oils, watercolors,
and charcoal. As a young boy I was given things to read.
I was given books that would develop phonetics and
grammar. As I grow older, however, I chose my own
books.books to feed my thoughts. I consumed, and
still do, the fast-food fiction of Tom Clancy and Michael
Crichton. Such books satiated a need for action and
enthrallment. However, I do not hold a single facet. My
tastes run everywhere. When reading John Cheever's
the Swimmer, I found myself stopping midstory
in awe of the images and diction that I felt so clearly
spoke to me. The description of levity at a coming storm
absorbed my mind. Since that time I have often found
myself drawn to various works of literature as an
expression of myself. Garcia-Marquez's A Very Old
man with Enormous Wings or Kafka's In the
Penal Colony have been reflecting pools for me.
Undoubtedly this is in part due to my desire to be a
writer. In any case my selection of what I read expresses
the person I am.
So too does the manner in
which I spend my time illustrate my character. Those
unique opportunities that have let me make my own choices
have become building blocks of who I am. On one side the
competitive rower and swimmer I have discovered the value
of cooperation and the thrill of victory, as well as
loss. At the same time I find myself often alone in
contemplation or staring at my computer pulling another
short story or stanza of a poem from my mind's deeper
corners. The duality of my love for a group of teammates
and athletics and my love for solitary creation and
shaping of imagination sculpts the self. The fact that I
choose these things makes them all the more personal.
Making the decision to sit for hours with a pen or a
paintbrush and create something out of my own imagination
clearly expresses my makeup as an individual.
This ability to choose
presents itself again, in my choice of friends. I look
for those individuals who share my interestsor at
the very least respect them. In surrounding myself with
fellow oarsmen or fellow writers, i continually surround
myself withmyself. The loyalty, humor and concern
that each of my friends exhibits reflects upon my
character. Who they are reflects who I am. This marvelous
correction embodies intricacy of self expression.
I see myself, not always as
clearly as I would like to, but I see myself.
From my books, to my
activities, to my friends a common thread is woven. Every
so often I calmly step back and take a breath, eye the
waters, and plunge my hand in. Sometimes I almost grab
him. Sometimes I do not. I know he exists though, that
slippery, fishy self, I have seen him in those choices I
have made.
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1998 Question Two Sample
Response: Rated 9
The Self. The oldest
question in the worldand the one that is the basis
for most philosophypertains to what, exactly, a
human is. The debate over how life exists and
self-perpetuates will never be answered, but there are
some potential answers as to questions on the human
state. Cogito ergo sum is not good
enoughtoo limiting. What defines a person as
himself? Much work has been based on this wondering; an
excerpt from Henry James' The Portrait of a Lady presents
two of the most often taken sides on the debateand
leaves it to the reader as to which is true. The first
concept of the self could be characterized as the more
civilized of the twoat least in some
ways. The character Madame Merle declares that the
self is defined as a matter of the whole
envelope of circumstances, meaning that everything
which affects each person in the slightest forms some
part of that person's self. Madame Merle's
stance assumes environment above nature, that development
in any form is always gradual, that all things are as
close and interlocking that a person is not really
himselfhe is instead parts of many other people,
each of whom is a part of many other people. Madam merle
also, in one of those less-than-savory turns in which
good motives are employed for means less than (kind? word
unreadable), firmly believes that only through
thingsacquired things, be they physical
or otherwisecan a person be complete.
Madame Merle's young friend
Isabel believes quite otherwise. According to Isabel's
thought, a person is only what he is. Whatever defines a
person is purely within that personnatural and
inborn. No one else can truly change the basic
characteristics of a person's self. Attempted changes can
be made, but actually to the person they will be nothing
more than a hinderance of the true self, not a
replacement of it or part of it. Thus, argues Isabel, it
is perfectly all right to have material thingsas
long as it is remembered that those things are a
reflection of their makers only. Extraneous additions
provide no part of the self's character. These are the
two primary arguments: that the self is defined by
others, and that the self is set and unassailable, which,
then, is correct? Leaving aside the accusations of
youthful idealism with which one taking the stance might
be called, it is safe and accurate to say that the second
statementIsabel'sis correct. This can be
proven both on its own merits and on the faults of the
other argument.
Madame Merle, in stating
that the self only comes about through process, ignores
the fact that something must be there for things to be
able to be added. She assumes that various elements can
combine in nothingness to form something new; and nothing
could be farther from the truth. There must be something
already thereIsabel's conception of the
selfif anything is to meld. Perhaps just as
important, Madame merle's argument is morally unsound in
its seemingly inevitable justification of material gain
as the highest goal. For such a resolution to flow from
philosophical argument renders the whole thing
treacherous, immoral, and unclean. Isabel, on the other
hand, begins with the coorect concept of the base-self.
While not denying the influence of outside factors, she
very quietly and effectively denies madame merle's belief
that these influences form the whole of the self. Isabel
recognizes that the truth must come from what is, not
what is added to what is. In addition, Isobel does not
deny some benefits from material gainboth for the
creator and the recipientbut she never strays from
her self-as-base stance, nor does she ever invoke
material gain as an inevitable outcome of her philosophy.
Therefore, on the whole, her argument is more morally
sound and has greater validity.
It is probably impossible
to convince every person of a correct ideology, though it
is certainly desirableit may just be that constant
philosophical strife is what sustains humankind. But it
is possible to state that the correct view is, indeed
correct, and at least to try to convince the world.
Therefore, it is possible and right to state that of the
two opinions given in this passage. Isabel'sthat of
the self existing purely on its own character and
termsis the correct one.
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LANGUAGE AP 1998- Question 1
Suggested
Time: 40 minutes
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| The following
letters constitute the complete correspondence between an
executive of the Coca-Cola company and a representative
of Grove Press. Read the letters carefully. Then write an
essay analyzing the rhetorical strategies each writer
uses to achieve his purpose and explaining which letter
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| Mr. R. W.
Seaver March 25, 1970 Executive Vice President
Grove Press, Inc.
214 Mercer Street
New York, New York 10012
Dear Mr. Seaver:
Several people have called
to our attention your advertisement for Diary of a
Harlem Schoolteacher by Jim Haskins, which appeared
in the New York Times March 3, 1970. The theme of the ad
is This book is like a weapon...it's the real
thing.
Since our company has made
use of It's the Real Thing to advertise
Coca-Cola long prior to the publication of the book, we
are writing to ask you to stop using this theme or slogan
in connection with the book.
We believe you will agree
that it is undesirable for our companies to make
simultaneous use of the real thing in
connection with our respective products. There will
always be likelihood of confusion as to the source or
sponsorship of the goods, and the use by such prominent
companies would dilute the distinctiveness of the trade
slogan and diminish its effectiveness and value as an
advertising and merchandising tool.
It's the Real
Thing was first used in advertising for Coca-Cola
over twenty-seven years ago to refer to our product. We
first used it in print advertising in 1942 and extended
it to outdoor advertising, including painted walls--some
of which are still displayed throughout the country. The
line has appeared in advertising for Coca-Cola during
succeeding years. For example, in 1954 we used
There's this about Coke--You Can't Beat the
Real Thing in national advertising. We
resumed national use of It's the Real Thing
in the summer of 1969 and it is our main thrust for 1970.
Please excuse my writing so
fully, but I wanted to explain why we feel it necessary
to ask you and your associates to use another line to
advertise Mr. Haskin's book.
We appreciate your
cooperation and your assurance that you will discontinue
the use of It's the real thing.
Sincerely,
Ira C. Herbert
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| Mr. Ira C
Herbert March 31, 1970 Coca-Cola USA
P.O. Drawer 1734
Atlanta, Georgia 30301
Dear Mr. Herbert:
Thank you for your letter
of March 25th, which has just reached me, doubtless
because of the mail strike.
We note with sympathy your
feeling that you have a proprietary interest in the
phrase It's the real thing, and I can fully
understand that the public might be confused by our use
of the expression, and mistake a book by a Harlem
schoolteacher for a six-pack of Coca-Cola. Accordingly,
we have instructed all our salesmen to notify bookstores
that whenever a customer comes in and asks for a copy of Diary
of a Harlem Schoolteacher they should request the
sales personnel to make sure that what the customer wants
is the book, rather than a Coke. This, we think, should
protect your interest and in no way harm ours.
We would certainly not want
to dilute the distinctiveness of your trade slogan nor
diminish its effectiveness as an advertising and
merchandising tool, but it did not occur to us that since
the slogan is so closely identified with your product,
those who read our ad may well tend to go out and buy a
Coke rather than our book. We have discussed this problem
in an executive committee meeting, and by a vote of seven
to six decided that, even if this were the case, we would
be happy to give Coke the residual benefit of our
advertising.
Problems not unsimilar to
the ones you raise in your letter have occurred to us in
the pasat. You may recall that we published Games
People Play which became one of the biggest
nonfiction best-sellers of all time, and spawned
conscious imitations (Games Children Play, Games
Psychiatrists Play, Games Ministers Play, etc.). I am
sure you will agree that this posed a far more direct and
deadly threat to both the author and ourselves that our
sue of It's the real thing. Further, Games
People Play has become part of our language, and one
sees it constantly in advertising, as a newspaper
headline, etc. The same is true of another book which we
published six or seven years ago, One Hundred Dollar
Misunderstanding.
Given our strong sentiments
concerning the First Amendment, we will defend to the
death your right to use It's the real thing
in any advertising you care to. We would hope you would
do the same for us, especially when no one here in our
advertising agency, I am sorry to say, realized that you
owned the phrase. We were merely quoting in our ads Peter
S. Prescott's review of Diary of a Harlem
Schoolteacher in Look which begins Diary
of a Harlem Schoolteacher is the real thing, a short,
spare, honest book which will, I suspect, be read a
generation hence as a classic....
With all best wishes,
Sincerely yours,
Richard Seaver
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LANGUAGE AP 1998- Question 3
Rubric
9 Essays
earning a score of 9 meet all the criteria for 8 papers
and in addition are
especially full or apt in their analysis or demonstrate particularly effective stylistic
control.
8
Essays earning a score of 8 effectively analyze how the
rhetorical strategies in each
letter achieve the author's purpose and explain convincingly which letter makes the
more persuasive argument. They are likely to recognize how specific
strategies (for example, syntax, tone, and diction) contribute to the writer's
purpose. Their prose demonstrates an ability to control a wide range of
the elements of effective writing but is not flawless.
7 Essays
earning a score of 7 fit the description of 6 essays but
employ more complete
analysis or more mature prose style.
6
Essays earning a score of 6 adequately analyze how the
rhetorical strategies of each
letter achieve their author's purposes and evaluate which letter makes the more
persuasive case. They may discuss rhetorical elements such as diction or tone
that contribute to the letter's effect, but their discussion may be
incomplete. A few lapses in diction or syntax may be present, but generally the
prose of 6 essays conveys their writers' ideas clearly.
5 Essays
earning a score of 5 analyze strategies used in each
letter to make their case but
their development of these strategies is limited or inconsistent. Their focus may be
unclear or their analysis insufficiently developed. A few lapses in diction
or syntax may be present, but usually the prose in 5 essays conveys their
writers' ideas more or less clearly.
4
Essays earning a score of 4 inadequately respond to the
task. Their analysis of
rhetorical strategies and effectiveness is limited in
accuracy or purpose. They may
misunderstand purpose or paraphrase the letters more than analyze them, or they may focus
on only one letter. The prose of 4 essays may convey their writers'
ideas adequately, but may suggest immature control over organization, diction
or syntax.
3 Essays
earning a score of 3 meet the criteria for the score of 4
but are less perceptive
about how rhetorical strategies connect to purpose in
these letters or less
consistent in their control of elements of writing.
2
Essays earning a score of 2 achieve little success in
analyzing how rhetorical
strategies contribute to relative effectiveness in the
two letters. These
essays may pay little attention to rhetorical features
and generalize about, or
seriously misread, tone or purpose. They may simply paraphrase or comment on the letters
without analyzing their strategies. The prose of 2 papers
often reveals consistent weaknesses in writing: a lack of development or organization,
grammatical problems, or a lack of control.
1 Essays
earning a score of 1 meet the criteria for the score of 2
but in addition are
especially simplistic in their discussion or weak in controlling elements of language.
0 Indicates
an on-topic response that receives no credit, such as one
that merely repeats the
prompt. Indicates a blank response or one that is
completely off topic.
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1998 Question Three Sample
Response: Rated 3
I think we should not have
a limit on the words we use to describe different
advertisements such as it's the real thing
because when people buy the merchandise they know wether
they want a coke or a book. I don't think having the same
slogan will interfere with any of the sales because
people ar not buying the slogan they are paying for the
merchandise in this certain situation. I would understand
if they named the book Coca-Cola Classic that
would make different because there would be questioning
on what the book is about and in business many say
Anything Goes, I also feel it was a sign of
ignorance of the person complaining on what the slogan is
being used on because he felt ownership towards the
slogan it's the real thing this has become
part of the English language so it really should'nt of
affected Mr. R. W. Seaver.
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1998 Question Three Sample
Response: Rated 5
The rhetorical strategies
of these two letters represent the differences between
both the manners of the writers and the companies they
work for. As a beverage producing company and a printing
press are nothing alike, so Mr. Seaver and Mr. Herbert re
very much two totally different individuals. Mr. Herbert,
the Coca-Cola employee of unknown status, puts up a weak
and selfish arguement. True Coca-Cola may have owned the
slogan first, by business standards of course. The fact
of the matter is, however, that no one can truly own
words, phrases, sentences and so forth. Statements come
and go all the time. They are repeated daily by hundreds
of people in multiple languages discussing a wide variety
of topics. Past possession is generally a good argument,
but in this case it is very, very weak. However, Mr.
Herbert was polite and to the point, which are very
commendable qualities.
Now on to the oppossition,
Mr. Seaver. Mr. Seaver being the Executive Vice President
of a well reknowed printing press certainly has the right
to argue his case with our mean Mr. Herbert, but he
really does go about it in a rather vicious manner.
Although the letter is
written in a formal syntax it is full of sarcasm and
undesirable insults to his recievers intellegence.
Obviously no one would ever mistake a book for a beverage
and it was entirely rude for Seaver to imply that Mr.
Herbert might be thinking that.
Overlooking these faults,
however, Mr. Seaver does carry the stronger arguement. He
goes about it in a much more aggressive way and has more
backing in the fact that words cannot truly be owned.
Also seeing as how they are two very different companies
it can be undeniably assumed that their products will not
be confused.
I guess this
is one of those case where the loud obnoxious man just
happens to get the better hand and thus wins the game.
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1998 Question Three Sample
Response: Rated 6
Mr. Seaver
and Mr. Herbert both pose convincing arguments concerning
the subject. Their
approaches are found to be quite different. Both address the problem with people using other
people's or something similar to other people's ideas to sell their
product. Although not always intentional, it does at times occur. Mr. Herbert's approach was kind,
courteous and considerate throughout. He informed Mr. Seaver's of Coca-Cola's
claim on the slogan and asked that they dismiss it from their ad
campaign. Mr. Herbert went into the history of the slogan and how it dated back
27 years. Mr. Herbert seemed genuinely concerned that the two products
carrying the same slogan might get confused. Mr. Seavers saw the congruence in a
very different light. His reply was very playful, cunning, vindictive,
and slightly rude. In the first paragraph he pokes fun at Mr.
Herbert's concern for the confusion the two products would cause by carrying the
same slogan. In the second paragraph he says that he believes that it
will help Coke sales and that his company has no problem with that. Next, he
goes into how the same situation has happened to them in the past and
that they fully understand. Lastly Mr. Seaver's describes his loyalty to
the Coke company and the backing of their slogan. In turn he asks for their
loyalty as well. Mr. Seaver's explained where the slogan originated from and
that it was not to spite them at all but from a review of the book.
I believe
that they should both be able to use the phrase. Unless
Coke patented it, it is
fair game. Mr. Seaver's article contained harsh and informal (childlike) undertones but
was a trully compelling argument at explaining just how neurotic Mr.
Herbert appeared for even bringing up the subject. The two should be able to
coexist using the same slogan. A person should hardly confuse a novel
and a drink. The two are very distinct and can stand proudly on
their own and without worry about a confusion. If the two companies have
faith in their products, then the people will too and not by
association to a catchy phrase.
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1998 Question Three Sample
Response: Rated 7
Coca-Cola certainly is
the real thing, and who would ever guess that
one could ever use this slogan in relation to another
product, especially when the two products differ so much
in composition. One product is obviously a beverage ment
to quench one's thirst; while the other product is a
book, ment to be read for pleasure or to gain
information. The connection between these two items is
almost non-existant, accept for one little phrase,
it's the real thing. (In a correspondence
between the Coca-Cola company and Grove Press, the delima
concerning these four little words, it's the real
thing, is apparent; however, it is the Coca-Cola Company
who succeeds in presenting a more sound argument for the
discontinued use of the slogan on Grove press' account.)
In addressing the Grove
Press on the issue of this slogan, the Coca-Cola Company
writes a letter to the executive vice-president of Grove
Press. In this letter, Ira C. Herbert addresses the Grove
Press in a polite manner, requesting that they
discontinue the use of the slogan that Coca-Cola has
possessed for so many years. Coca-Cola states that
It's the real Thing was first used in
advertising for Coca-Cola over twenty-seven years ago to
refer to our product. They continue to give
historical data concerning the slogan and its end
endorsement of their product. They also say that we
believe you will agree that it is undesirable for our
companies to make simultaneous use of the real
thing in connection with our respective
products. In making this assumption, they then
proceed in telling about the confusion that could result.
Then, in the end, they thank the Grove Press their
cooperation and their discontinued use of this slogan.
Therefore, the rhetorical devices are used to support
assumptions and provide factual data to support their
claim.
However, on the flip side
of the coin, Grove Press was not so respectful when
responding to Coca-Cola's letter and request. Grove
Press' vice-president Richard Seaver made such sarcastic
comments as ...I can fully understand that the
public might be confused by our use of the expression and
mistake a book by a Harlem school-teacher for a six pack
of Coca-Cola. Remarks such as this one
decorate his letter, and he fails to provide factual data
to support his assumption. This he relies on sarcasims to
support his point. However, he does address the first
Amendment claiming that we will defend to the death
your right to use `It's the real thing' in any
advertising you care to. We would hope you would do the
same for us...
It quickly becomes evident
to the reader who the more persuasive writer is. It is
the Coca-Cola Company for their effective use of
rhetoricl devices to support their claims. They not only
provide a factual base for their request, but they also
use a curtious tone when addressing the Grove Press
Comapny. The Coca-Cola Company didn't rely on false and
sarcastic remarks. In also looking at the organization
the letter from Ira C. Herbert was much more uniform,
presenting an argument and then supporting it. On the
other hand, Richard Seaver was repetitive at times
claiming that the stealing of another's slogan is no big
deal and will serve beneficial in the long run.
In conclusion, a well
thought out and argued letter, lacking rude sarcasim,
will alway prove the best in the end. If one wants to
achieve a goal or respond to someone's request, they
shouldn't rely on bitter tones. They, insted, should rely
on good, strong, sound arguments to achieve their goal.
So, it is evident that by using these techniques, the
Coca-Cola Company's letter offered a more persuasive case
than the Grove Press' letter.
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1998 Question Three Sample
Response: Rated 8
The violation of copyright
law is a serious offense in society, but free speech is
still an institution, the opinions of Coca-Cola
executives notwithstanding.
The first letter written by
Mr. Herbert of Coca-Cola uses historical anecdotes to
strengthen Coke's claim on the phrase It's the real
thing. After a lengthy (and pedantic) recitation of
the merits of Coke and its advertising, Mr. Herbert
concludes that Grove press will, as a foregone
conclusion, aquiesce to Coca-Cola's demands and thanks
the publishers in advance for their cooperation and
assurance.
Mr. Seaver's reply though
much less professional, is far more
effective. The reply is written as soon as the original
letter is recieved, a certain assurance of the importance
of Coca-Cola's concerns to Grove press. Mr. Seaver then
adopts a heavily sarcastic tone and expresses his concern
for the public's confusion (alluding to the final
letter), and the possibility of their mistaking a
book by a Harlem schoolteacher for a six-pack of
Coca-Cola. Salesmen have been instructed,
apparently, to ensure prospective buyers of the book
really want the book, not Cokethe absurdity of
which statement serves to highlight the absurdity of
Coke's claim.
Since the Slogan is
closely identified with Coke (this despite
the fact that no one in a presumable quite large
publishing institution knew of Coke's claim on the
phrase.) Coke is, according to Seaver, welcome to any
residual benefit of Grove
advertisingnot quite as undesirable as
Herbert said.
Seaver goes through
Herbert's letter and refutes it piece by piece. There is
first an almost direct quote stating that Grove
would certainly not want to dispute the
distinctiveness of Coke's trade slogan nor diminish its
effectiveness. Seaver even uses Herbert's strategy
of historical anecdote to explain a situation with
spinoff's from a famous book, the possible repercussion
of which cause Coca-Cola's worries to pale in comparison.
Freedom of speech for Coke is defended by Seaver with an
allusion to Voltaire's famous I will defend to the
death your right to sy it statement. Surely, then,
common citizens such as Peter S. Prescott may have the
same luxury, and Grove Press can quote his opinion
without fear of repercussions. Seaver concludes despite
trials of unenlightened Coca-Cola executives on an upbeat
note with best wishes to the author of what
must be one of the most absurd arguments of history.
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1998 Question Three Sample
Response: Rated 9
Irony and cynicism have
often assumed a dual vote throughout literature, both
degrading an opponent when used rhetorially and
supporting one's own argument. By elevating the petty and
insignificant points of the opposition's argument to a
universally consequent status, an author can lead his
audience to an unconscious identification with his cause
by convincing them of the ridiculous and often
unnecessary nature of the other's complaint. Through
insiduous mockery and blatant insincerity, a previously
sound and cordial argument can appear inconsequential or
fallacious.
Such is the case concerning
the correspondance between the Coca-Cola company and
Grover Press; although one may initially assume
Coca-Cola's conclusions and be in accordance with the
legitimacy of their complaintin this case, the
usurpation of an advertising sloganall sympathies
are dispelled by the cynicism and sarcasm of the Grove
rebuttal. Coca-Cola speaks amiably and respectfully,
never lowering to the level of mockery or debasement, and
outlines two main arguments concerning the dual use of
the slogan in question, each of which is disdainfully
refuted in an ironic, witty response.
The Coca-Cola Company
initially asserts that the simultaneous usage of their
slogan will engender public confusion regarding the
identification with a particular product; the corporation
also states that the catchphrase's effectiveness will be
diluted as a merchandising tool. They argue logically
solely on the basis of historical precedent; their main
weapon is a simple appeal to reason. Although not
strictly limited to the traditional western modus
ponens logical form, the argument follows in
general traditional debate form: an assertion supported
by concrete evidence (for examples the writer insinuates
that his corporation should use the slogan in question
simply because it has done so prior to Grove Press'
usage; he supports his claim with a detailed history of
that particular advertising campain.) His case seems
objective, unbiased, and entirely rational.
All trappings of reason are
annulled, however, by Grove Press' bitingly ironic
rejoinder. Coca-Cola's primary argument concerning public
confusion and disassociation with the motto is attacked,
bearing the full brunt of the author's sarcasm. Phrases
such as, I can fully understand that the public
might be confused by our use of the expression and
mistake a book...for a six-pack of Coca-Cola and
we have instructed all sales personnel to make sure
that what the customer wants is a book and not a
Coke mock the previously seemingly logical argument
and demonstrate the frivolity of the complaint. Although
illogical and vituperative, the author's ad
homineum style of rhetoric exerts a more lasting
and convincing sway on the reader. By duplicating exactly
phrases from the Coca-Cola letter, the very cordiality of
the style is made a target of ridicule as well,
undermining the credence and effectiveness of the first
letter. The Groves Press' more familiar tone and ease of
expression the formal, respectful adornment of the
Coca-Cola letter is scorned as wellalso supports
their argument in the eyes of the reader. Although
obstreperous and critical, irony and sarcasmwhen
liberally appliedcan often emotionally undermine
the arguments of an opponent to such an extent as to
cause the reader to favor it over simple logic.
Occasionally, it pays to be rude.
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